這篇是寫給 GRE 班的同學,先前有提到要分享峰子考作文的心得。

我托福作文拿了接近滿分的 5.5,倒底是運氣好還是實力佳?我想應該不是運氣好的關係,因為若是依照正常情況,應該是要拿滿分才對。

講這樣的話並非自大,而是來自於理性的分析,因為在 ETS官方網站 Criterion 的練習中http://criterion.ets.org/chun_shin/index.php,最後不論我怎麼寫,一定都是六分,所以當托福作文成績沒達滿分時,我心裏已有些暗幹了:「媽的,你自家的軟體效度還這麼差!」不過因為沒差很多,峰子也就沒太計較了。

這裏提供的方法應會比補習班的那一套有效,這也是為什麼我總是強調獨立思考的重要性,它會讓你輕易超越了好幾年的知識累積。在補習班的教法中,它強調作文的「邏輯性」,所以老師總是針對題目一再的細說邏輯,講真的,峰子的邏輯應還不會太差,但我發現如此的寫法對分數幫助並不大。與補習班相反的是,我強調「去邏輯」,因為去了邏輯之後,寫起來才會快,字數也才會多,而字數才是真正影響分數的關鍵。

我會作這樣的大膽假設(與補習班的觀點相反),是因為我發現電腦很難判斷邏輯,也因此,你給它一個大致的說法即可,另一點是,即使是人工閱卷,由於閱卷時間極短,也不太可能在短時間發現邏輯的謬誤。所以我的建議是:別管邏輯了,給個大概的說法,儘量衝字數吧!

所以你會在文末發現我第一次在練習作文時,30分內僅寫了 219 字(得四分),但最後一次時已經可以寫到 353 字(得六分),要寫到這種字數,根本就是下筆就沒停過的寫法。但即便如此,還是有一些基本的原則是我要提醒的:

1. 段落分明:起段 + 理由 + 理由 + 理由 + 末段,建議五段落格式。
2. 起承轉合:多用 more, furthermore, besides, in addition......等字。
3. 理由段結構需完整:理由段主要句為main idea,支撐 main idea 的句子為 supporting idea,使用 supporting idea 時就是用到我第 2 點所談的起承轉合用字。
4. 單句、複句、合句的交互運用。
5. 贅字勿用:
不要重覆相同的單字,例如一樣是「極佳的」,可分別用 wonderful 與 marvelous 來表示。
6. pattern 的運用:為了減少時間,一定要有個模組來套,如此才可以衝出最高字數,你可以在我最後一篇例文中的紅字中發現我的 pattern 使用。

更詳細的寫法都可以在ETS的線上教學找到http://www.wretch.cc/blog/mapleduh&article_id=2133583,這裏只提出其中較重要者,其實如果你不是要考托福,而只是單純想學好英文作文,基本上也可以不用去坊間找書了,ETS 的教法應比書上寫得好很多才是。

就是這些了,峰子的英語教學也到此告一段落,希望能對那些有心學好英文的人有幫助,祝福你們了。



Jun 08, 2005:第一次 4 分(219 字)
Experience or
Books:4/6 

It has been said, "Not everything that is learned is contained in books." Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?

When it comes to knowledge, we can generally get it from both books and experience. The knowledge from books usually has a wider base of knowledge and more vesatile than that gained from experience. Despite this, the knowledge based on personal experience has several advantages that is irreplacable to one's living, and that makes it more important to an individual.

Knowledge from experience is based on the things we see, hear and feel in our livings. Therefore, it's usually more true than that gained in books. Moreover, while we experience things on our own, we can have better memory of that and this makes us learn things well. Besides, the knowledge from experience can explore a whole new area that books couldn't reach. By doing so, you might pursue your own interests as well as a new line of work. And finally, through personal experience, one can have more emotional feelings than reading books, and this is the most crucial things to a people's life. For all of these reasons, I do believe knowledge from experience is better than that from books.

In short, knowledge from experience can not only broaden our horizons, it can also give us more emotional feelings that can't get through books, and this makes the knowledge from experience more important than that from books.



Jun 13, 2005:第二次 5 分(243 字)
Money and Success:5/6

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? 
           Only people who earn a lot of money are successful.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.


As an old saying goes, "money talks." Undoubtless, money brings us much convience and necessarities in our life, and people with more fortune usually get more possibility to fufill their wishes. Despite this, there are still many precious things in our life that money can't buy. Hence, I disagree that only people who earn a lot of money are successful, and there are sevral reasons as follows.

First of all, money can't buy lots of stuffs such as friendship, happiness, achievement and so on. All of this is not based on how much wealth you have, instead, it complies to one's attitude of life. Besides, many successful people reach their goals in different areas like literature, sports, music, and pholosophy, and all that has nothing to do with the money. Moreover, nowadays people define success rarely by the fortune and instead mainly by whether he is happy or not. And finally, people who desire to make lots of bucks are usually less happier than those who don't; this is because making money usually brings lots of pressure to people and that causes them unhappy. For all of these reasons, I don't recognize the idea that "more money, more successful."

From the forgoing, the conclusion is self-evident. Although money can give man lots of material things, but most of time they can get the most valuable stuffs, as above, in our lives. According to this, judging a person's success by money is absolutly wrong.



Jun 28, 2005 :第三次 5 分(252 字)

New Product:5/6
If you could invent something new, what product would you develop? Use specific details to explain why this invention is needed.

People's opinions towards what products bring they best benefits differ from person to person. Some might think the efficiency is the most crucial factor while talking about a new product, while others might think the entertainment is the most important matter. As to me, If I could invent any machine I wish, the time traveller machine would be the first choice; therefore, we could change what we don't want to desire to happen and figure out something we don't know.

People always regret what they have done before, and with a time traveller machine, we could alternate the things that we do not intend to do. We could travel back to do something to win back our lovers' hearts. Besides, Using this machine can also prevent something bad from happening, like terrorism. And finally, we can go back not only doing something that we have done wrong, but also having something we have not done before. With a time machine, it will unravel many mysterious things unknown, especially those substantial historical events. Moreover, police can also use it to detect the crime and make the whole society more peaceful. Last but not least, Using this equipment can bring us to many periods of time we have never explored before.

For all of these reasons, developing a machine of time travelling would have the benefits not only changing the old events but also exploring a barnd-new world. Hence, to invent a appratus to bring me back to do something is my personal favorite.



Jun 29, 2005:第四次 5 分(254 字)

Playing and Winning :5/6

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? 
            Playing a game is fun only when you win. 
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

People's opinions towards games differ from person to person. Some might think winning a game is the most crucial matter when it comes to doing sports, while others might think there are lots more reasons, like achieving entertainments or attaining health, to have a game beyond the reason of winning. As to me, playing a game is fun not only when you are winning, but also for other important reasons as bellows.

To begin with, we could have healthy figures through a tournament and that usually brings us lots of merits. Moreover, due to scientifical experiments, we already know people can easily become gleeful when they are doing exercises regardless of winning or losing. And finally, it is more likely to build relationships with others while having games with one another.

In addition, some might play the game to build up their social connections with others. First of all, they can talk to people about their daily life so as to have a more smoothy chats. Secondly, playing games can also contribute to better understanding of their thoughts, and that can reduce unnecessary conflicks. Last but not least, a game itself can stimulus us to imagine more about our behaviors.

For all of these reasons above, it's obvious that playing a game is fun not only when you win, but it also has lots of advantages beyond winning. Certainly, we can have many good results, like what has depicted above, through the games, and therefore we should hold a game not just for fun.



Jun 29, 2005:第五次 6 分(254 字)
Reasons for Attending College:6/6

People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

People's opinions towards games differ from person to person. Some might think winning a game is the most crucial matter when it comes to doing sports, while others might think there are lots more reasons, like achieving entertainments or attaining health, to have a game beyond the reason of winning. As to me, playing a game is fun not only when you are winning, but also for other important reasons as bellows.

To begin with, we could have healthy figures through a tournament and that usually brings us lots of merits. Moreover, due to scientifical experiments, we already know people can easily become gleeful when they are doing exercises regardless of winning or losing. And finally, it is more likely to build relationships with others while having games with one another.

In addition, some might play the game to build up their social connections with others. First of all, they can talk to people about their daily life so as to have a more smoothy chats. Secondly, playing games can also contribute to better understanding of their thoughts, and that can reduce unnecessary conflicks. Last but not least, a game itself can stimulus us to imagine more about our behaviors.

For all of these reasons above, it's obvious that playing a game is fun not only when you win, but it also has lots of advantages beyond winning. Certainly, we can have many good results, like what has depicted above, through the games, and therefore we should hold a game not just for fun.



Jun 30, 2005:第六次 6 分(353 字)

Resources Disappearing:6/6 

Many parts of the world are losing important natural resources, such as forests, animals, or clean water. Choose one resource that is disappearing and explain why it needs to be saved. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

People's opinions towards what is the most important resources in earth differ from person to person. undoubtedly, resources have contributed to human's modernization greatly in history, but with depleting these resources, earth has become more and more fragile than before. Some might think the civilization of human beings is the most important matter, while others might think maintaining resources is the most crucial one. As to me, I personally believe that the clean water is the one that is needed to be saved for the time being.

When it comes to water, we can always find that the water appears everywhere. It seems all the creatures, including animals and plants, need clean water to sustain their lives. Besides, water can give us the nutritions that are necessary to our bodies. And finally, clean water is especially sustantial when we talk about the ecosystem, for that almost every organic has demands for water.

Saving clean water can also bring us a number of benefits rather than just to the earth itself. People can use water to maintain their health and to attain a more healthy living. Moreover, we need the water to supply all the things, such as plants, poultry, beverages and so on, in our daily life so as to keep us alive.

There is no denying that not only earth needs the clean water to keep the environment more clearly, but all the creatures also need that to save lives. In addition, clean water can give us lots of joy of placement, such as swimming pool, water games and fishing pools. Furthermore, using the clean water can help men stimulate the industrialization to the whole civilization.

For all of these reasons above, it is obvious that saving the clean water will definitely to our best advantage, and thus we should try our best to conserve it. Certainly, there are still lots of other sustantial resources needed to be saved at this moment, but, without doubts, clean water would be the most crucial one to the all human beings for now. Hence, we should preserve this precious asset as possible as we can.

 


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